Hello, I found this community on Reddit I think and it seems really cool and I hope people still use this site. Here’s a song I made recently. I’m pretty new to writing lyrics and have made some songs before this one but I still consider myself a beginner I guess. I’d like some feedback on the lyrics and maybe the structure of the song too. https://youtu.be/Xvm6x6cdkGw?si=8CRbtwSU9Pir9k7C
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this is v good
nothing felt cliche. eyes/time, same(things?)/place, tonight/life/tight/by/side/die all imperfect rhymes that feel genuine.
structure fits the song. i like the alternating low/high register thing. rly nice voice.
write more !!
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Thank you! what about this one?
I accidentally posted the wrong link lol